My First Poem

Shelgon's Dream

Inside this thick white shell
I'm feeling like in hell
Waiting for the bell
When it cracks my shell

I wonder why
A pidgey can fly
I try try and try
Try to reach the sky

I'm just lie down on my bed
Wishing to the stars
Wishing I am dead
So I can fly to the Mars

But tomorrow will be a better day
Hope I evolve I may
Shones by the moonray
Hoping for a better day

My first poem turn out to be very funny Lolllll :lol:

Ooow guess nobody like my poems, oh well I stop my career as a writer and start to become a ................ Arrrgh I can't do spriting or making a RPG or writing and also... Whatever::)

You can bury dead people for a living, Dragon Berry, it's a perfect job for you. That, or join a liberal support group. Either way, they both pretty much are full of people that are to retarded to get a job and have no future for themselves.

10 kyu! u'r the first person reading this

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Originally Posted by dragon_berry

Shelgon's Dream

Inside this thick white shell
I'm feeling like in hell
Waiting for the bell
When it cracks my shell

I wonder why
A pidgey can fly
I try try and try
Try to reach the sky

I'm just lie down on my bed
Wishing to the stars
Wishing I am dead
So I can fly to the Mars

But tomorrow will be a better day
Hope I evolve I may
Shones by the moonray
Hoping for a better day

My first poem turn out to be very funny Lolllll :lol:

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i love your poem.i wrote it down and now i'm going to put it on my wall.

that is very good dragon berry. it is pretty original.:)

like it. odd rhyming pattern though.
AAAA, BBBB, CDCD, EEEE

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Originally Posted by dragon_berry

Shelgon's Dream

Inside this thick white shell
I'm feeling like in hell
Waiting for the bell
When it cracks my shell

I wonder why
A pidgey can fly
I try try and try
Try to reach the sky

I'm just lie down on my bed
Wishing to the stars
Wishing I am dead
So I can fly to the Mars

But tomorrow will be a better day
Hope I evolve I may
Shones by the moonray
Hoping for a better day

My first poem turn out to be very funny Lolllll :lol:

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I hpoed it has something to do with berries. Now i'm hungry! pls give me a pecha(sp?) berry.

Dragon Berry's poem structure seems to be very similar to mine.
*Gasp*
Could you be-?!
No, it isn't possible...

:-/ It's OK.

Mmmm after I ate my lunch I'm gonna make some more.

Someday I wake up
From my daily nap
I dont' know what's up
I flap flap and flap

I spread my wings up in the sky
And realized I can fly
This time I ain't lie
I really do fly

Johto Kanto and Hoenn
Don't forgot the Shinou land
Soon I'll travel through them
And tell 'em to my friend

I flap my wings through the clouds
Now not through the muds
With Pecha Berry around my tastebuds
Through the sunset through the clouds

Now I'm getting to like writing poems

i like that one to dragonberry lmbo

And lmbo is....

laugh my but off

asghagshagshaghsags

Not bad actually, the tempo isnt too great though...

Awesome.

Thanks but I don't feel to make more of 'em

This is the first thing I've ever in my time here seen from dragonberry that I actually kind of like..

It's really cool. It makes you feel as if you're small, and you're dream is as big as you're heart! Loving it!

Eh...I like it.

It was a nice poem, i liked it

Keep working. And please stick to rhyming poems. Free verse is not poetry.

It's actually easy once you get the hang of it/Soon you'll see where rhyming will fit.

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Originally Posted by dragon_berry

Hope I evolve I may

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^Yoda, lol.

Nice for a first poem, though.