Hey guys. I was wondering if anyone would be willing to offer some feedback (constructive preferably) on my story the Eon Team. The only request I make is, if you want to say my writing sucks, please tell me why so I can improve. I'll ignore any blatant insults with no reasoning behind them. Same goes for compliments. I'd would appreciate if you said why. Though, unlike insulting, I... guess (meek smile) the explanation isn't entirely necessary. I know some people just like certain stories (or dislike them. If you don't have any specific reason for disliking, that works as a decent explanation.)

So, what do you like about the story? What do you not like? Thanks in advance.

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