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    My First Poem

    Shelgon's Dream

    Inside this thick white shell
    I'm feeling like in hell
    Waiting for the bell
    When it cracks my shell

    I wonder why
    A pidgey can fly
    I try try and try
    Try to reach the sky

    I'm just lie down on my bed
    Wishing to the stars
    Wishing I am dead
    So I can fly to the Mars

    But tomorrow will be a better day
    Hope I evolve I may
    Shones by the moonray
    Hoping for a better day




    My first poem turn out to be very funny Lolllll
    --A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world--

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    Ooow guess nobody like my poems, oh well I stop my career as a writer and start to become a ................ Arrrgh I can't do spriting or making a RPG or writing and also... Whatever
    --A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world--

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    You can bury dead people for a living, Dragon Berry, it's a perfect job for you. That, or join a liberal support group. Either way, they both pretty much are full of people that are to retarded to get a job and have no future for themselves.

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    10 kyu! u'r the first person reading this
    --A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world--

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    Quote Originally Posted by dragon_berry View Post
    Shelgon's Dream

    Inside this thick white shell
    I'm feeling like in hell
    Waiting for the bell
    When it cracks my shell

    I wonder why
    A pidgey can fly
    I try try and try
    Try to reach the sky

    I'm just lie down on my bed
    Wishing to the stars
    Wishing I am dead
    So I can fly to the Mars

    But tomorrow will be a better day
    Hope I evolve I may
    Shones by the moonray
    Hoping for a better day




    My first poem turn out to be very funny Lolllll
    i love your poem.i wrote it down and now i'm going to put it on my wall.

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    that is very good dragon berry. it is pretty original.

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    like it. odd rhyming pattern though.
    AAAA, BBBB, CDCD, EEEE

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    Quote Originally Posted by dragon_berry View Post
    Shelgon's Dream

    Inside this thick white shell
    I'm feeling like in hell
    Waiting for the bell
    When it cracks my shell

    I wonder why
    A pidgey can fly
    I try try and try
    Try to reach the sky

    I'm just lie down on my bed
    Wishing to the stars
    Wishing I am dead
    So I can fly to the Mars

    But tomorrow will be a better day
    Hope I evolve I may
    Shones by the moonray
    Hoping for a better day




    My first poem turn out to be very funny Lolllll

    I hpoed it has something to do with berries. Now i'm hungry! pls give me a pecha(sp?) berry.

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    Dragon Berry's poem structure seems to be very similar to mine.
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    It's OK.

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    Mmmm after I ate my lunch I'm gonna make some more.
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    Someday I wake up
    From my daily nap
    I dont' know what's up
    I flap flap and flap

    I spread my wings up in the sky
    And realized I can fly
    This time I ain't lie
    I really do fly

    Johto Kanto and Hoenn
    Don't forgot the Shinou land
    Soon I'll travel through them
    And tell 'em to my friend

    I flap my wings through the clouds
    Now not through the muds
    With Pecha Berry around my tastebuds
    Through the sunset through the clouds

    Now I'm getting to like writing poems
    --A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world--

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    i like that one to dragonberry lmbo

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    And lmbo is....
    --A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world--

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    laugh my but off

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    asghagshagshaghsags

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    Not bad actually, the tempo isnt too great though...

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    Awesome.

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    Thanks but I don't feel to make more of 'em
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    This is the first thing I've ever in my time here seen from dragonberry that I actually kind of like..
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    It's really cool. It makes you feel as if you're small, and you're dream is as big as you're heart! Loving it!
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    Eh...I like it.
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    It was a nice poem, i liked it

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    Keep working. And please stick to rhyming poems. Free verse is not poetry.

    It's actually easy once you get the hang of it/Soon you'll see where rhyming will fit.
    Dibujo cuadros.

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    Quote Originally Posted by dragon_berry View Post
    Hope I evolve I may
    ^Yoda, lol.

    Nice for a first poem, though.
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