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    For an education scolarship, just read it over and tell me if something makes absolutly no fucking sense like you usually do for my posts. I don't expect an in depth literary analysis.

    I have wanted to be a teacher since I was in third grade. My sister was just entering kindergarten and she wanted to be ahead of the class. So we went and played some school house with my sister, but unlike the regular cases of childhood schoolhouse, I actually knew some actual things to teach. I believe I taught my sister, or at least gave her a start, and the basic ideas of addition, subtraction, and reading words. It was from this early success that I went into the field of education.

    As I grew up teaching became a serious prospect for me as a future job. It was around 6th grade that I abandoned by dreams of becoming a fire fighter, inventor, and mad scientist, as they became unrealistic, or just not suited to me. I also began to want to make a lasting impact on the world; I knew it was unlikely that I could become a politian or a revolutionary inventor. So I settled on the humble teacher who could change the world by enlightening future generations by teaching them. By teaching younger generations information, they will slowly yet surely become more intellectual and fair people that are able to solve the problems to tomorrow. At the very least I can change children's lives and set them on the right course for success or happiness in life.

    I plan on becoming a high school teacher, meaning I want to teach middle school or high school students. Many people have asked me why I want to do this, as children of those ages are the most rebellious and unruly. I feel though it is at this age that you can truly affect a child's life. At earlier ages a child learns basic things that honestly they will learn even from the worst teachers, such as reading and simple math. In college you’re already on the right path and its mainly prep for real life. Middle and high school is the time a child starts truly setting their path in life; they need guidance most in this time. Also elementary students are very hyperactive and I don't think I could deal with that. I am not sure how college is, I would imagine teaching it would be rather boring as those are students who have already come to accept education, if I want to I could always continue my degree to teach college.

    I hope to teach science or mathematics, as those are generally the areas I excel in the most, I am not sure which area I want to focus in, but I don't have to decide until I am a Junior, and I may just do them both to increase my odds of being hired. I am also considering getting a minor in something as a back up, or to aid my resume, for example I have been considering looking into engineering. I may choose to teach, at least for a short time, in a city's lower class areas as those areas tend to desperately need teachers, and have been known to aid in paying off student loans if you teach for them.

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    Don't send that in for gods sake. I'll help edit it tomorrow.

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    it makes sense sense and is readable.

    but flat out say you ARE going to teach in a lower income school. this essay aint a fucking contract so they wont hold you to it or anything, but it'll make you sound better.
    "I'll go," said Chagataev. "But what will I do there? Build socialism?"
    "What else?" said the secretary.

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    yeah obviously the writing is TERRIBLE but if kirby just wants to know if its readable and literate, it is
    "I'll go," said Chagataev. "But what will I do there? Build socialism?"
    "What else?" said the secretary.

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    In reverie, I felt you holding me. Dogar The Brave's Avatar
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    Mad scientist? Really Kirby? This isn't a joke like on pd, this is for the real world.

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    My personality is pretty much universal.

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    U wont get anywhere in life being true to yourself. Have to play the game.

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    I have refused to play that game on quite a few occasions.

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    I don't know how to play. I lack a cunning nature.

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    *Scholarship

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    I came, I saw, I proofread

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