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    Vanity of vanities, all is vanity Hicky's Avatar
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    except its not yes, sir

    its yes, and then there is an emotional pause, and he says, yes dad.

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    dramatic pauses are essential in every good novel
    When the Devil is too busy
    And Death's a bit too much
    They call on me by name you see,
    For my special touch.

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    but it is of great consequence to the story that his dad was a deadbeat

    a parole officer does not scream deadbeat

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mex View Post
    dramatic pauses are essential in every good novel
    there will be an entire half a page blank

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    damn right there will be
    When the Devil is too busy
    And Death's a bit too much
    They call on me by name you see,
    For my special touch.

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    tim if hicky refuses to cooperate then you mex and i can just write this novel ourselves

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    im not refusing to cooperate

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    then agree with is this instant!
    When the Devil is too busy
    And Death's a bit too much
    They call on me by name you see,
    For my special touch.

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    im already writing it!

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    my new house

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    there also needs to be a warden who has burns on his face and resents the prisoner

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    the prisoner is not troublesome enough to warrant resent

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    geez guys do i have to write this myself?

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    this is just nocturne, god.

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    Give us a sample text Hicky
    When the Devil is too busy
    And Death's a bit too much
    They call on me by name you see,
    For my special touch.

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    Quote Originally Posted by God View Post
    the prisoner is not troublesome enough to warrant resent
    Well then how about him and the warren were in the same class as schoolboys and were fierce rivals.

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    the prisoner didnt have time for school rivalries he was too busy stealing

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    then how about this. Although he was a good thief and stole a lot, when he got put in the slammer, the warden set him up for it.

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    what no way

    if he got set up, that would total be counterintuitive to him having a trouble crime filled life and having to turn his life around

    there will be no counter intuitions in this novel

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    He still stole all of the stuff, but the guy set him up by telling the FUZZ about where he was going. GEEZ, learn how to draw conclusions.

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    there doesnt need to be a criminal sidestory

    its a novel about cleansing the heart

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    So...As a young boy (with a horrid past) steals to survive (nothing like a Wii or a PS3...right?) get's thrown in juvinile hall, grows up being hateful to all law enforcement...is interested in the football team, gets parolled...plays the game and wins...blah blah blah*...the end...



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    NO. NO NO NO NO NO


    No stealing!

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    I dub thee, book..."Copped Out".
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    Way too cheesy. It needs to be attention grabbing without going over the edge

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