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    Master Of All Pokemon Master's Avatar
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    Default I Will Get You Back One Day

    You took me when I was so alone
    Fed me, taught me, gave me a home
    But now I'm older I see something you never thought I could
    You killed my family, if I could turn back time I would

    I trusted you and fought by your side
    I gave my life to you, be friends till each we died
    Now it's time for my revenge so run far away
    My journey begins this very day

    I'll hunt you down and pay the favour I owe
    No matter how fast or far you can go
    Be afraid, be very afraid when I say you're dead
    Cower and whimper...no use hiding within your bed

    My fur is blazing with the anger inside, there's so much it's bad for my power
    It's bursting out and hurting me, I can't last the hour
    I close my eyes and suddenly
    I can clearly see
    That you killed my family for hatred and a feel for muder, cold

    I may not be strong, tall, fast or able to swim but I have a special skill
    Not running or talking, swimming or writting, but to kill
    I've put it aside all this time and intend to use it so on you
    Track you to the ends of time, learning something new

    I will get you back one day and that's my solid word
    Forget everything you know and listen to what you've heard
    Night aids me and the sun leads me
    For my family, I'll be all I can be
    To take from you what you took from me.
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    FAIL.
    "A human being should be able to change a diaper, plan an invasion, butcher a hog, conn a ship, design a building, write a sonnet, balance accounts, build a wall, set a bone, comfort the dying, take orders, give orders, cooperate, act alone, solve equations, analyze a new problem, pitch manure, program a computer, cook a tasty meal, fight efficiently, die gallantly. Specialization is for insects." - Time Enough For Love, by Robert Heinlein

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    I like it.

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    You got me back, that's all that matters...



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    Consider rephrasing "up in your head" sounds sort of ghetto. may as well say "all up in yo face boyeeeeee"

    Also if you are dying in the first paragraph how are you going to get them back one day?

    Other than that it sounds pretty good.

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    Still sounds ignorant IMO.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Firestorm View Post
    Yeah...hey Pokemon Master...maybe you should just let it drop. I know you're a great writer from what you show me at school. Just let the whole thing drop...they can tell you heaps of things but what it really comes down to is what you do k G? I mean Pokemon Master....that's really the truth of it.
    Ahahahahah pokemon master

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    That does not make senese! At all chickie! But i liked until i he kill his family that was sad chickie! Why would a trainer kill his pokemons family that son't add up!
    c Ya l8r luv bug!:-*

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    does anyone know what lmao no one will tell me afjkhfgkhajklhgkjahfkhkla
    c Ya l8r luv bug!:-*

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